Keep your eyes on the window, drift away in the noise.
Static cling on my clothes, caught along your cuticles.
Save your words for someone who could define the line.
I知 never going to be the one, apologies forgotten.
Great start. I love the imagery here. The last line is the weakest, wish it would've been on par with others because it makes it falter a bit. But still great start.
Nice, nice. Love the break, short and simple but this keeps the momentum and the great imagery.
So for now we値l just be, horizontal complete.
Perfect shapes in the dark, temporary art.
We walk by the sand and believe that we池e saints
of a youthful bliss, no more consequences.
Smoke and light in the dark, silhouette of your heart.
Could this be so wrong? Say I知 not the only one.
My feelings on this are similar to the first stanza, love it all but the last line, which again makes the stanza falter a bit. I feel like the last line is too familiar and safe. It just feels out of place in the rest.
Great. Really great.
Yeah, so I loved this. Great imagery and ideas, it felt new and original. I didn't feel like you were rehashing ideas, this felt new. I liked that. Flow was great.
Great job, man! Glad I saw this.
Not if I can fucking help it. I am back.