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07:51 AM on 07/13/12 
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Seteden
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Male - 18 Years Old
I realize this isn't the best of poems but, I wrote it in the morning without really stopping to think about it in about 5 minutes after a three month writing block. I'm hoping to expand upon it so, if anyone has any advice, it'd be appreciated.





Eyes Heavy
Hair Messy
Body Sore
What is it that I have in store?

This isn't where I'm meant to be
Everything around me, isn't me.
Why do I feel so lost?
What will all of this cost?

The other path is right next to me
But if I take it, what will I see?
Am I ready for the road less ventured?
Or am I about to be mentally tortured?

My Eyes are Heavy
My Hair is Messy
My Body is Sore
It's breaking me down to the core

And then I look over and see your smile.
And whisper to myself that I can walk any which mile
For always by me, you have been
It's why I call you, My best friend.
04:50 PM on 07/13/12 
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Your poem is word for word what my girlfriend and I are going through. I love it the way it is
03:56 AM on 07/14/12 
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Use a bit more metaphor, my friend.



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