Heaven Again: Part Two
My heart loses it shape and turn into tears
That i drop every night when i wish you where here
I just hope you will wait for me my dear
What i miss the most is your warm hands
That you always laid in mine when nobody cares
About the things going on inside of my head that i dosen't understand
What about the future we both planned
Now i see it burning down like a crasing airplane
Because you left me here crying in the rain
So take me with you back to heaven again
This is insulting.
The rhyming is so forced that it borders on cut and paste cliche. There is no flow, lines are set up just for rhymes. The imagery is boring and all redundant/cliche and the lack of polish shows almost no respect for the reader.
Please be considerate when writing and posting. Never insult the reader.