[jake1000]

Another one from me! I won't tell you the meaning or anything as I think it's pretty clear. As always, feel free to share your opinions, don't hesitate to tell me if you think it's awful, but constructive criticism is better :)


Verse 1

Crashing waves and thunder fill your mind
The sun hasn’t shun in days
Someone close is gone
Buried
Dead
It’s all that you think about
Memories
Love
Occupy your head

Verse 2

You bury your head in your soft, subtle hands
A tear runs down your cheek
That single line on your face
Says that you’re young
But old enough to feel pain
You’re looking for a way out
Why is this happening now?

CHORUS

You can’t see
Through the mist and the shadows
You can’t see
Through the hurt and the loss
But time is a healer
And soon you will see
That while you have lost
There’s more still to live for
You’ve still got a lot
You’ve… still got us
Keep on, Keep on

Verse 3

You’ve felt cast away for sometime now
It’s hard to get back when you’ve been adrift
But you’re getting close to the shore
You’ve been living on an island
Deserted, all by yourself
It’s time to get back to your home
We are here
Stop sulking, start sharing, you’re not alone

CHORUS

You can’t see
Through the mist and the shadows
You can’t see
Through the hurt and the loss
But time is a healer
And soon you will see
That while you have lost
There’s more still to live for
You’ve still got a lot
You’ve… still got us
Keep on, Keep on

Bridge

What are you doing now?
You’re basking in the light
You’ve got yourself a new job
You’ve got yourself a new life
Hard times may come again
But now you realize
Things just keep on going
You have to keep on…
You have to keep on…

[Blindkid]

The bridge is my favorite part, its all relatable

[jake1000]

Thanks for your opinion :) The song was supposed to be exactly that, simple and relatable

[Bocheech]

nice job dude

[topekoms]

Very Good

[jake1000]

Thanks :)

[One World]

I must admit, to me the feel of the song is to be uplifting and to carry the message to never give up. However, having said that. The bridge, if it is also the ending trails the opposite way. This could very well just be my own experiences.

"But now you realize
Things just keep on going
You have to keep on…
You have to keep on…"

These lyrics pull me down a little bit just because i look at life and how things go on, so you really only have one choice and that is to carry on as you say. I don't know if that makes sense but just that I feel there should be more to life, than just carrying on. I'm probably delusional, anyway. A great piece, I really enjoyed it, thank you.

Chris

[Voguerista]

Very cool. I love it.

[jake1000]

Thanks OneWorld, totally understand your point and actually agree with you, so might be worth me having a re-write of the end there, but glad you enjoyed the rest of it.

[tarzanboy]

Another job well done. You deserve it.

[jake1000]

Thanks! :)

[Magicpeix]

got a poetic feel! liked it

[cut!print]

Other than the over usage of ending lines in 'now' I really like it. Very relate able.

[xCoconutheadx]

Keep up the good work, are you in a band?

[jake1000]

Thanks man! Nah i'm not, am thinking of joining one though!