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01:34 PM on 09/26/12 
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SilverJayStorm
Destiny is of one's choice.
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I'm outta time
Running outta time
I'm outta time
The doors are closing
The doors are closing

The Walls are building higher
The I can't see beyond them
The walls are closing in
I can't breathe
I can't breathe

Don't let me go
Don't let me die
Don't let me fade from your memory
Don't let me fade from your memory

I never said goodbye
I never said hello
I never even spoke
I never even saw
The hurt I caused

and now

I can't even hear you
I've given up
Given up
I don't understand
Never will I understand
I'm drowing in dissapointment
Dissapointment
dissapointment......


It's more than I can take....

More than I can see....

And now i'm

I'm outta time
Running outta time
I'm outta time
The doors are closing
The doors are closing

When I said I was done
When I said I gave up
I didn't mean this

Everything is falling apart, falling apart
I'm loosing everything
I ever had, ever had

And soon enough
I'll
Be
Gone
01:44 PM on 09/26/12 
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Really good keep it up(: But just a little tip try not to repeat to much like you did at "Don't let me go Don't let me die Don't let me fade from your memory Don't let me fade from your memory I never said goodbye I never said hello I never even spoke I never even saw" In my opinion it can become a bit to much but i really like it still tho(;
01:54 PM on 09/26/12 
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Really good keep it up(: But just a little tip try not to repeat to much like you did at "Don't let me go Don't let me die Don't let me fade from your memory Don't let me fade from your memory I never said goodbye I never said hello I never even spoke I never even saw" In my opinion it can become a bit to much but i really like it still tho(;

Thanks for the advice! =D I'll edit it and change a few of the lyrics. Thanks again for your advice!
02:00 PM on 09/26/12 
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Thanks for the advice! =D I'll edit it and change a few of the lyrics. Thanks again for your advice!
Haha you're welcome(: And you don't have to chance it tho you did a amazing job and you're only 13.. Not many 13 years old girls can write like that
02:05 PM on 09/26/12 
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Haha you're welcome(: And you don't have to chance it tho you did a amazing job and you're only 13.. Not many 13 years old girls can write like that

Thanks! That's really nice for you to say. I'll work on trying to write more songs. I love to write and I love music, so I'm sure I'll develop better songs.
02:19 PM on 09/26/12 
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Thanks! That's really nice for you to say. I'll work on trying to write more songs. I love to write and I love music, so I'm sure I'll develop better songs.
Cool I'll make sure to check out your stuff(: It's pretty badass that you are so young and not afriad to share your work on the internet Ha(;
02:37 PM on 09/26/12 
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Cool I'll make sure to check out your stuff(: It's pretty badass that you are so young and not afriad to share your work on the internet Ha(;

lol. Well, I'm not, but my parents don't won't me too. I'll check out your stuff too =)
02:44 PM on 09/26/12 
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lol. Well, I'm not, but my parents don't won't me too. I'll check out your stuff too =)
Oh no please don't 99.9% of my lyrics sucks d: Oh well maybe i am a bit to hard on myself there i think my best work i posted on here are "Heaven Again" people seem to like it and i self think it's pretty good(: but holy shit i posted alot of crap on here xD

Hey you're that girl who wrote the 9/11 song! Wow i didn't notic before now you're really talented more talented than i knew dx
05:22 PM on 09/26/12 
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Oh no please don't 99.9% of my lyrics sucks d: Oh well maybe i am a bit to hard on myself there i think my best work i posted on here are "Heaven Again" people seem to like it and i self think it's pretty good(: but holy shit i posted alot of crap on here xD

Hey you're that girl who wrote the 9/11 song! Wow i didn't notic before now you're really talented more talented than i knew dx

Yeah, I did write it. I also wrote "Never Said Never Heard (First song I've written)". Also, I'm sure that not everything/almost everything you put on here is bad! =)
03:11 AM on 09/28/12 
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I like this alot:) I also like the other songs you wrote. Keep up the good work
08:10 AM on 09/30/12 
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Pretty goood
11:01 AM on 09/30/12 
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I like this alot:) I also like the other songs you wrote. Keep up the good work

Thanks!=D
11:01 AM on 09/30/12 
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Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it =)
07:06 AM on 10/16/12 
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I like your work, keep writing!
01:33 PM on 10/16/12 
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I like your work, keep writing!

Aww, thanks!



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